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Full moon mini-poem
« on: January 13, 2017, 06:29:01 pm »
Wrote a reverse-haiku yesterday for the full moon (didn't realise it was reversed until after - couldn't recall how many syllables should be in each line as I wrote this on the train, and got it exactly wrong).  Still, I was kind of pleased with the result so thought I'd share it.

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January: chill, wet, dark
bright moon behind cloud
shower down inspiration

It's part poem, part invocation, as you can tell, which is why I haven't discarded it.  Haiku-wise, I will get it right next time!
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Re: Full moon mini-poem
« Reply #1 on: January 14, 2017, 07:14:16 pm »
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Haiku-wise, I will get it right next time!

 
You got the syllable count reversed, but you also nailed the 'word picture, not narrative' nature of haiku, which is something a lot of (Western) folks miss as they over-focus on '5-7-5'. Seems to me that makes yours more true to the concept than those who get the form right but not the substance.

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Re: Full moon mini-poem
« Reply #2 on: January 16, 2017, 06:10:58 pm »
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You got the syllable count reversed, but you also nailed the 'word picture, not narrative' nature of haiku, which is something a lot of (Western) folks miss as they over-focus on '5-7-5'. Seems to me that makes yours more true to the concept than those who get the form right but not the substance.

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